New Script after Problems

After realising we had problems with our script we decided to start fresh and think of a new one. We needed Simon to mention to Lewis that his wife is going to die and we also needed Simon ending up getting shot. This was what we came up with

Simon- Your supposed to be finding me, not losing me.
Lewis-I will get you eventually, might aswell come out now.
Simon-What, so you can shoot me...You don't want that, I have information.
Lewis- I know, thats why im here
Simon-No you dont, its about your wife...
Lewis- (Looks angry)
Simon- On a train to London I believe, what would you say if I dunno... the train blew up.
Lewis- (Looks angrier) You cant hide forever
Simon- You better go find her (Twig Snaps, Lewis notices Simon and shoots him)
(Simon falls to the floor and we see Lewis running off)

Then cuts to train scene and Lewis running.

These are the shots we may use for the conversation.

Simon- OTS shot of Lewis looking for Simon in bushes
Lewis- Point of View from Simon looking at Lewis
Simon- Looking at Lewis looking around then skip to a close up
Lewis- Looking at Simon in bushes from behind
Simon- Close up of Simon
Lewis- See's his facial expression
Simon- Point of view from Simon again, Then close up of Lewis still looking
Lewis-Distant shot of Lewis
Simon- See Simon start trying to move away, then a shot of a twig snapping, see Lewis turn around and then shoots Simon
We then see the shot of Simon falling and Lewis starting to run.

(We are having quite afew problems with script and will keep trying to improve it)